All Comments on 'Discovering Sarah Pt. 01'

Very good build up. Lots of suspense and sexual tension. Likeable characters.

Having been a nudist for almost 40 years, your description is so accurate you must be a nudist. Love the story so far and looking forward to the next addition! Have seen from 80 year olds to young teens at the nude beach and seen from pure 10`s to those who are not and it does not matter when you find that piece and security nudity brings you described. Seen strippers with the hottest bodies and not been hard....well not fully, and just enjoyed talking. Keep it going and excellent writing.

Hard to believe this is your first story! Looking forward to Chapter 2, which you've already posted, but I'll take a break b/c the anticipation will be sooo delicious, like extended foreplay.

I gave you 4 stars only because of your need of an editor/proofreader. Please take the time to proofread before posting. Don't get in a hurry.

Great start! I look forward to reading more of your writing. Good style and pacing.

Paragraph 3: "So how does an everyday average Joe end up in a tropical paradise with his cock buried in his 28-year-old sister in law while she is going down on a 35-year-old goddess? That my friends, is a story."

It ruins the whole wonderment about where the story and the characters are going.

Other than that, it was a nice buildup.

Such a hot story and now to read part 2.