All Comments on 'Dystopia Pt. 01'

I enjoyed this part. Good story plot. It would read easier if you had smaller paragraphs.

I love dystopian stories.

Looking forward to more, and posted soon, I hope.

And characters that I could come to empathize with. I'm not sure I'd like them, and I think perhaps one should not entirely like the characters in a dystopian setting - it takes away from the reader's appreciation of all that has changed.

Thank you !

hope you keep writing!

Intriguing and although the first installment is intro and build up, I wasn't distracted for a moment. Keep writing!!!

Your story is really good compared to most of the stories on this site, so I would really like for you to keep writing. You're a very good writer, as is your story. I don't mean to sound impatient, but it's been almost 4 months since the last installment and I really think you should of had something by now.

I'm really hoping that you have plans to continue this.

You have a pretty gòd talent at world building, really enjoying it so far!

..... to what may turn out to be a fantastic story with absorbing characters. Sorry about the four stars; I meant to hit five but hit four by accident. Mea culpa. I am sure to correct that with the next chapter. 🙂

I am really enjoying this. Yours is a well-told story, with lots of details that really help the reader to visualize Emil's farm and the developing relationship between slave and master.