All Comments on 'Early 50's'

You have the same 'fatal flaw' that I do - you write in the past tense. Try changing your weres to ares, was to is, in short, bring the action into the present. Get a good editor like Trisha to help you. Your work is good, it deserves that final polish.

Past tense is fine... Interesting story.

Cute little fantasy, but this never happened.

50's, and the man has an orgasm in the limo, on the balcony, twice with two women, then again with his wife going home? 5 times in one night? Even with Viagara, being in his 50's, he'd be lucky to pull off 5 orgasms in 5 nites!!!

What tripe!

At the age of 55, my husband has had four orgasms in sixteen hours, without the use of any kind of drug.

A little middle age fantasy poem is harmless.