All Comments on 'EARS Ch. 01'

This story reads like a script to a cheesy porn. The writing was forced like "oh no, I have to come up with some dialogue to justify the alien booty call." There were also a lot of painful grammar and mechanical mistakes. Please take a minute to find the comma button on your keyboard. Also, use Lit's editing service or get someone to review stories first. Spell check is not fool proof

A)Horrid grammar.B)Whats up with all those boxes. C) I've read better story lines come up with by preschoolers. No planet is going to make war on another because of the death of a general's wife..

I was waiting for the line "All your base are belong to us", but that would have shown some intelligence while writing this.