All Comments on 'Elicitation of his Intimate Seed'

But please get an editor or do a grammar check next time!

well done i hope you will make more and can you make poison ivy sex batman thank you

OK. Thanks for the criticism. What precisely do I need to work on? :)

Sorry, I meant that last message for RedArrowKuczynski.

I'm not into telling someone how to write their tales but for me I like for someone to proof read and edit where needed. It helps with the flow and limits distraction. You want the readers engaged with your story. You don't want their immersion being broken by little stuff.

I'm at work so I can't provide examples right now.

There are too many errors of basic punctuation and grammar to go into here, but I suggest you get an editor or try a program like Grammarly or ProWritingAid to help you. The many errors are distracting.

One example is in the first paragraph (which does not bode well for the rest).

"The area was quite warm with trees, shrubbery, and various exotic plants surrounded him." Either put a period after "warm" and drop "with" or make it "surrounding" him.

Thank you for the advice. I hope I did better in the other chapters. My first chapter was not going to be the greatest. However, I hope to improve from my mistakes.

Happy anniversary on the story. You've come a long way!

When is the rest of the comic coming out?

I plan to release one page a week to my E-Hentai galleries profile. I'm only going to be doing the first chapter though.