by allusive1
That was awesome! After reading all of the Sex Slave, this was a great diversion! I do hope that Emily ( on of my crushes in collage) and Josh, get to have at least another opportunity!
Great writing! I thing that I might have lived this when I was 20 or so! I'm 56 now, but memories! Awesome! Thanks!
I fun read, and a great story line.
This could lead into a multi chapter booklet if the Auhur is up to it, I hope so ⭕️
244 Jake
I loved the depth of emotion your characters developed for each other! I also enjoyed seeing the thoughts from both points of view.
I just found this wonderful story. It was so fantastically written, drawing you in and not letting go! You had to keep reading; it was erotic, moving, sensitive, and made me so wet! But also, it was romantic and lovely, too. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Wow. That was a great piece of writing. Loved the unspoken thought presentation. Loved the incredibly wild sex scenes. Seemed on the edge of unbelievability but never went over the edge. Unlike others, I'm not sure it needs a sequel as part of the charm of this is the sudden unexpected attraction of Emily to the young man and the uncertainty by both of them as to what will happen. Thank you for sharing your writing.
This is a great story. I hope they end up together for a long time. I think they need each other
a wonderful story. Just enough character development, just enough detail. Well crafted!
Thanks for a great story. If I were a horny widow I'd want to do just what Emily did. ;) I wish I could get off that many times!
Awesome story. As I am with a wonderful person who is about twice my age this story really hits close.
It started off good and got better. Although a little long it was worth the read. Good luck in the contest.
It's a great story. The only thing is it sounds to me as if it should be a one-time only event. The amazing, fiery relation seems almost like a shooting star. The age difference is considerable and, my opinion, would prevent any significant repeats. But what a great story. Thank you.
... jesse
A very well developed storyline and the characters seemed so real and loving towards each other.
I hope that there will be another chapter about the two of them getting together but for a longer time.
Thanks for the super sweet story.
Great story with both characters well developed. Hope to see more!
A great story about two well LAID out characters. I could not stop reading!!
I hope you have a follow up to find out if they get together!
I really want to know if they get together again. And maybe something more.
Loved it, thank you.
Awesomely hot!!! Should get a 7! Tie that girl down!! Tell Victoria to get some Nomex thongs for our Emily, she needs flame-resistant! Good hot writing, only one "it's" for "its", literate, believable. Good local color. Not just wham-bam, although there's sure a lot of that. Allusive, you got style.
I really hope there is a second chapter. The characters deserve a happy conclusion.
Very good, well written, nice story for a change from a woman´s point of view. Is there a chance it will be continued ??????