All Comments on 'Emma's Growing Pains'

Very erotic language, but it needs a more plausable story line. This type of fantasy needs to border on the believable. Not "did this happen", but rather "could this happen". Sadly, none of the characters in this story seem real.

The problem here is that the story doesn't say anything about either the physical sensation of being fucked for the first time or the psychological significance either. I'm a man: I'd like to understand something about seduction, penetration, sexual feeling, from the female side of the great divide. In other words, the story doesn't come alive for the reader - or not for this one.

let silly, unilluminating comments discourage Emma - or you either, k_karen!

This was all right.

you dont need to have a complicated turn on story it was perfect!!

The first commenters are missing the point. Sure the background could have been more involved, but flowery

verbosity is a product of reflection, and this story

took place in realtime. The circumstances aren't neccessarily that absurd either, a wedding is a mating

ritual after all, and someone's got to shag the bridesmaids.

what, she just opened the door?

I'm sorry, but cardboard characters and trite storylines do not readbiltiy make.

It's the weirdest story ever, so she talked to him at the wedding and then somehow he knew what room she was staying in, and went up to fuck her?

And she was pretending to be asleep so he practically raped her?!

Also, there's not enough detail to make this an erotic story, no reader would get turned on by this!