All Comments on 'Endangered Ch. 06'

Thx for coming back n putting this out .... It was a long wait

AAAAAAAAAAAH! CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE SO GLAD YOU'RE BACK!

haven't read yet but wanted to say thank you. i hope you keep writing for a long time cause you aee one of the best writers here.

Mine wasn't quite as long, or wouldn't have been. But i'm really interested to see how close I cut the cloth in your direction, see if I had similar ideas.

JC

I haven't read it yet, but I wanted to say thank you for continuing the story!

I have been spoiled by Tefler and your earlier works and to have this show up was such a gift and it ROCKS! I can not wait to see the next couple of chapters - you are such a gifted writer. Thank you again and please keep up the GREAT WORK! Any thoughts on your timing on the next chapters, ie once a month? We have created a Addicts Support Group for Tefler's Three Square Meals and I can see that we are going to have to add you work as a part of the addiction processing process.

Doors open, beds made. Welcome home.

Firstly I must apologise for giving up hope, that this wonderful creation would be furthered. So thanks for the work and here is hoping your future chapters appear (slightly) quicker than the last intervile.....

Glad I keept you in my favorites so I saw when you started writing again so as not to miss out on this great story. Also happy it posted on my day off so i could just binge read the whole thing with no interuptions. Hope you keep up the great work :)

F*ing fantastic.....as always

Slow chapters are much better than none at all, you have an amazing story here. Take your time... but please do not stop. :D

Yay! Finally a new chapter! Leeegend :-)

I just love this story, absolutley brilliant. Keep up the good work.

5 * of course, thanks for an awesome chapter! Cant wait for the next one, hope all goes well!

Cheers

Xen

I'm so glad that your back. I was surprised when I saw that you where updated your bio to show that you where continuing the story because like so many other stories on lit I thought this one was dead.

Welcome back. Love the story

Love the story and the track it is taking, absolutely captured by the characters!!!! Can't wait for the next chapter

I have become Immi's fan...i love this character even more than our dragon...damn you ltpc it's your fault

oh thank you so very much , i have been wait years for this stunning story to continue. what awesome writing , can't wait for more ( not years please !!! ). simply stunning.

Hopefully not as long for the next one aye?

I am so glad you are back

5*

Now that was a great chapter. The action, drama, suspense, and the sex wow. You also mixed a little bit of fun into it. I'm quite pleased with the progress you made with this chapter. Looking forward to the nex time.

More Endangered! I'm very happy to see more of this story, so few manage to mesh sex, plot, and awesome world building but endangered manages it all.

I was seriously worried that this series was going to end up consigned to the dustbin of the internet that is reserved for abandoned works. Seeing that you are continuing it, and that you already have several other chapters in works or in the wings is a delight and a treat. I cannot wait to see how you shape it in the future as well.

The new characters you have added are a treat as well, I have to say that Immi is my current favorite, despite a favor of redheads. Best of luck in the continuing and I cannot wait to see more chapters when they are ready.

I was worried this would be another one of the endless unfinished works on this site glad you decided to come back to it and add another chapter. Great chapter and I hope you will be able to add the next soon.

Beautiful.

I'm stunned how close to the mark I was!

Man, that's really made my day. My plan was to have Claire become pregnant almost instantly, a meeting for some Ether training along with some form of issue within as his dragon almost turns full in the Ether from being attacked. I also had some loose plans for the Synod though mine were following a different path.

i'd planned for Radek to come for Jonathan in Britain with his lackeys, either capturing or killing him and framing it on the High Elves, whom were the ones to kill Chris's dad. After the High Elf gets framed, Reyla's dark side gets exposed to Chris as she either explodes on the High Elf *trying ot gain his favour* or she uses the chance to jump up into the Synod herself with conniving schemes in mind. Meanwhile the Synod fall apart and their half of the Revelation discussions goes to shit. meanwhile Chris and Claire, with mum, hit it off and are forced into some sort of protective custody because Claire's pregnant and now Chris, with his almost full transform, is the most powerful Being alive. He feels threatened, trapped and doesn't know what to do, so flee's to the Ether at the end of the chapter.

Was I close or what? that's not bad for a ghost writer to get that many major points. Well chuffed.

Awesome work here, and remember if oyu need help with anything just leme know!

JC

Well LTPC, this was quite the coming back you gave us. The chapter had what you would hope for to compliment the other chapters. We see Chris responding to the new world he has been exposed to, how he is dealing with the idea of meeting the other dragons, and deal with his growing brood. We also get to see how he cares for his #1 girl who has been with him before he was awakened. Can't wait to see Chapter 7.

What a great nickname/insult/description of a vampire! Woo-hoo! I laughed out loud at that. GREAT turn of phrase! Okay, enough of that...back to the story!

worry's for weaklings!

Great stuff! I re-read the whole series so it'd be fresh when I read this chapter - this is such a great read!

Yeah, I know: you said the interactions get harder to write, and space out, and keep track of as Chris's brood grows..,bring 'em on baby! This seems like a recipe for awesome, kinky, wildly sexy fun!

Keep it comin'!

The chapter was a nice read

Thanks for continuing the story

The only thing that I can add to an already great story is a comment on the Beings population. In one of the earlier chapter, you wrote that the Beings population numbered in the low thousands ( 4,500 ) world-wide. This number seems extremely low too almost criminally wrong. The world population is a little over 7 Billions at last count. Even at 3% - 5%, the Beings population should be at least 210 to 350 millions strong. At 7% of the world population, the Beings population would be 490 millions,

I also had an idea about away for Chris to make hundreds of millions of dollars legally. The plants/flowers in the Ether are used in the making of powerful spells and potions. So, why doesn't he start a business selling Ether plants/flowers. If, he sold 600,000 plants/flowers x $750 - 40% ( 25% for Federal&State taxes and 15% to the Being Synod, their is no social security tax on Beings businesses because most beings live too long.) , he would make $270 millions.

I find wonderful irony that the wind aspect dragon's name, Petra, means rock.

I loved it so worth the wait. Cat wait for the next episode. I hope we dont have to wait a few more years for chapter 7 but I completely understand not wanting to put out something you aren't happy with. we believe in you ltpc 😁

Thank you for continuing this story. I love it. Can't wait to read what will happen next.

It's been so long. I had to reread the whole story because I didn't remember the details. My verdict: it was absolutely worth the wait! Thank you so much for sharing this awesome story.

Just to provide a bit more info about the Being population in this story in reply to a comment above. Worldwide, I envision there are around one and a half million Beings. In Reyla's territory, there are only about 4500 but that is by far the smallest in the States. There are around 40,000 Beings in the US, total. These numbers are tiny compared to the general human population and that's why Beings have been so careful, up until now, to keep the Secret in tact. They fear mass persecution if they are ever discovered for what they are.

This was so worth the wait. I too had to re-read the whole story. Loved every facet of it.

I can't wait for the next installment which, hopefully won't be as long coming...?

I just discovered this series, and i loved every bit of it. Please continue writing this story, i know ill be following it with great anticipation.

Can't wait for the next chapter

I can't really say anything like welcome back like the others, since I only just discovered this story the other day after getting a recommendation, so I'll just give a review.

You've got an intriguing story here that has a good deal of potential. Personally, I would like to see more story and less sex, but that's just me. Of course, this is only chapter six. Most stories that have a strong story don't really start shifting away from the erotica until they get past chapter 10 at the earliest, as the erotica is used to cement the character relationships and possibly help with development if done correctly. At some point though, the sex and erotica starts getting tedious and repetitive. That's when you should start focusing more on the story. I would say you're not quite to that point yet. At the rate you've been going (you certainly haven't wasted any time building the harem, have you?), I'd estimate probably another five or six chapters before you get there.

From a technical aspect, your writing's not bad, however I would suggest getting another editor or two to help out. Just one editor doesn't seem to be enough because I've noted throughout this story numerous instances of missing words, incorrect word usage, and not-so-good sentence structure, all of which an editor should have caught. Having more than one editor, maybe even as many as three or four, means that what one doesn't catch, another might. Plus, they might even be able to help contribute to the story and help clarify things that may seem clear to you, but not so much to the reader, which can help improve the overall quality. I recommend talking to another author here on Lit, a guy called Tefler. He's currently a fan favorite around here and has a ridiculous word output rate considering the high quality he maintains. He works with three editors for his story, and he might be able to recommend their services if they aren't too busy.

Anyways, that's it for my review. I'm going to be keeping an eye on this series, as I'd like to see where it goes and how things get resolved. Hopefully we won't have to wait too long for the next chapter, right?

Such an important institution will need it's own place. I hope it will be a 'Training Center and Headquarters'. Aka B.I.A.T.C.H.

I am truly enthralled b6 this stroy only a couple of authors on this site have had me wanting more and wanting to read over other activities

Well you must be doing something right, LTPC. You have attracted the attentions of Jedi-Khan, hopefully Crazy will voice his opinions as well.... (They tend be entertaining...)

I only found this series two days ago but I love it! You are a great writer and I hope that we will see more of this story soon. I can't wait!

I'm so happy with what you are writing right now! And as far as worrying about too much of a harem and sex focus, who cares? You writing what makes you happy means a longer story life!

I longed how long this chapter was, so much happened!

I agree with Jedi about getting another editor or two. There are enough mistakes to make it noticeable. (such as moth instead of mouth on the second last page)

I would happily volunteer for such services. If you don't feel like waiting for feedback after finishing, you can always share the chapters in sections, so part 1 is done editing by the time you are done part 3 or whatever.

I volunteer to be an editor and I make a mistake...

I meant to say I *loved* how long the chapter was!

So, about Michelle's media packages -- after they bring Chris around, she should make a television series where they show him doing stuff like dancing, playing with kids, and talking about love. To address his concerns about security, they don't actually have to say that he's a dragon; they can just show him in his purple half-form without making any indication that he has other forms, and they can figure out something to call him other than a "dragon." And they can add in a bit of magic, like having him appear out of the ether at the start of every show, which isn't something that most dragons can do. Also, they don't need to reveal his real name; they can make something up, instead. Maybe they can use something similar to his last name, Baryst -- like, say, Barney. Barney the Purple Dinosaur.

Above anon comment has just made me question if I'm carrying some repressed Barney shit from childhood. You win internet.

You have a good story. You write well. What's not to like?

As pointed out. Minor errors and occasionally sentenced construction are a distraction. (Says me struggling to make words fit on a line) ln any case get an editor but one understands that it's your damn story.

Keep up the good work with Barney and have fun.

He cares way too much about how his first girlfriend thinks and they're both acting kind of dumb about it all. She keeps telling him that it's okay and then when he does something with one of his "brood" she gets all upset. It's like either dump him or get over it. I just think she's a little too needy given that he's been completely upfront about his nature the entire time. Other than the first girlfriend character I really enjoy this story keep up the good work and maybe hopefully you can write out these problems in the next upcoming chapters? :)

Cant wait for the next chapters. Ignore the haters. I wouldnt change a thing with the story including annabel. Remember its chris magic that makes his brood ok with everything or at least with each other involving him. The fact that annabel keeps rolling with the punches but internally struggles with things at least every once in a while gives her character depth. If she was just always ok with everything magic or not her character would be dull at least in my opinion. Seriously though love the story cant wait for whats next. Keep up the hard work. And ignore the barney comments. Wish you would release chapter 7 sooner then later but i get it your story your rules but would suggest giving it to an editor now so that way when you are done with 8 you can instantly release 7. And always thank you for such an amazing story.

love this story any eta on ch 7?

release 7

Please for the love of all things holy, STFU.

I'd rather he takes 2 extra weeks to release a version he is happy with than for you to act like an entitled little b**** and cause him to leave the site for good.

If you really must ask him to release at a schedule faster than now. You need to do three things,

1. Be polite

2. Request rather than Order

3. Thank the nice author, he is taking time out of his fap schedule to enable content for us.

I have been checking the site everyday for the past 2 weeks for an update but be patient. Unlike you and me, he probably has a life and stuff.

Umm so i've been a fan since you released in 2014 and I love your work. I'm not the kind of person to push you to release the next chapter as I'm an author myself. My fear is that I'm going to get so wrapped up in this story and then you drop off again. I understand life has challenges just umm well please don't disappoint us. We love your work and if we never saw it to completion it would be the most heinous of crimes. I, as well as everybody else eagerly await the forthcoming chapters.

Sincerely

Wolf

While i am unsure if it was worth a three year wait, it is definitely well worth the cumulative anticipation. I love where its going in general. I can see Annabelle's dad running after Chris with a shotgun when this all gets out, definitely some lols waiting to happen there. Also I would imagine many people would be concerned with the more direct effects on the economy. i mean, if people already get bent over Mexican immigrants taking our jobs or how many of our jobs are outsourced to other countries, just think of how pissed they could get if their entire class of job becomes obsolete. For example, if all electricity production was replaced by gems already filled with enough juice to power a house for a year. I suspect more than a few previously employed workers would get more than a little pissed. Just food for thought. really there are so many parts to a plan like the Reveal that there are a near limitless number of story plots that could be spawned from that bit alone. i find myself giddy just thinking of where you could go with this tale as I eagerly await the next installation. Keep it up please. =D

When I saw your story had a new chapter, I let out such a whoop that my roommates came running, wondering if I'd been hurt! Thank you soooo much!! I can't gush enough about how wonderful your writing makes me feel!

Thank you, thank you, thank you!

For not abandoning this story and such a great new chapter. Looking forward to the next chapter.

I don't understand how anyone can rate it anything other than a 5.

Your series is by far one of the best on this website ( and I challenge anyone to break that assertion) and I was extremely happy to see that you were A, in fact not dead, and B, continuing this lovely story! Keep up the good work, because I'm ALMOST willing to wait 3 more years for another one.

Chapter was awesome even on a second read through. I don't get why Michelle was so pushy on being a poster boy it does seems like a terrible idea.

Hope the next chapter is soon

you mention under your biography that chapter 8 is 30K already and I cannot wait for it, your story is very good but where is chapter 7 then? Is it coming out soon?

Love reading this series. Hoping Chris and Petra get paired up soon

It's a recurring question but I'm writing one chapter ahead at the moment. This gives me room to add and change things to better fit in with the next chapter. It also gives plenty of time for editing, which chapter 7 is currently undergoing. Once I'm happy that chapter 8 is feature complete, I'll release 7.

Looking forward to see 7 soon then?

This is how Lillian gets free, isn't it? As part of a bribe for him to do this. Hmm. Can't wait for seven!

this is amazing!!! I'm done. I was trying to publish some of my own stuff, but why bother?!?!? :)

Seriously, thank you for this, and I can't wait for the next one!

Thank you for the clarification about how you post after you finish the next chapter. I was confused about that as I'm sure others were. Keep up the good work and thank you for sharing your ability with us.

I realy enjoyed the story the only negative from my perspective is the interaction with Annabel which I found to be boring a lot of the times and corny. Keep up the good work.

SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

Your bio says your finished with ch.8 so does that mean we should be expecting ch.7 some time soon. Or am i misunderstanding it somehow?

I've been reading stories on literotica for more than 15 years. This story is my absolute favorite and each chapter I enjoy even more! Thank you for sharing this and for taking the time to write and put this together. I'm truly enjoying reading your work!

Release chapter 7 quickly such a huge cliff hanger. PS I've read this story several times I had thought u had stopped writing. Ty for continuing story.

Please please publish the rest..

To whoever sent me an anon email asking for the werebison and her "milky Zeppelin's" to reappear... fear not, I'm way ahead of you.

Please add more scenes on ether world... Last one definitely stirred up my imagination

Read this several times can't wait for the next chapter

Where have you been? This is an exciting and engrossing story. I am hooked. This has the potential to become an epic tale. If you keep this up, I will rank you amount the greats. Thank you for your wonderful contributions to the genre.

any news on how much longer before we see chapter 7, we're getting anxious.

was hoping you hadn't forgotten the werebison

Hell yeah another chapter. It was epic and I can't wait for more!

I can honestly say, without a doubt, that this has quickly become one of my favorite stories on lit. Hands down, one of the best I've read. Love it so far. Can not wait for the next chapter. Wish there was an email notification feature here so I knew the moment the next chapter was posted. Please keep this story going.

Werebison for nanny!

She lactates without being pregnant, right? What a great wet-nurse! That'd make her friends with Chris' other brood members making it easier to transition her to a full member herself.

Shhhh, no spoilers!

Any time soon?

Awesome story I can't wait to read more please continue writing your doing a amazing job

I'm so glad your back and i happened to stumble upon this again years later

Take your time. No rush, it's quality like this that is essential. When the plot has me on edge reading at 2 am because I can't stop you know it's "the good shit". The realistic characters are great and relatable. Good character development as well. All around very not disapointing. That noted I am eager for the next installment.

i hope you post both chapters soon I need my fix your story is just to good to go months apart I only follow a few stories on this site and yours is in my all time favorites

I'm very glad that you've returned to continue this story! I hope that you might consider releasing it as a book at some point too.

It's an amazing story in a rich beautifully imagined world.

I'm addicted. I usually only come on this site to get a sexual fantasy fix. I stumbled on the first chapter of Endangered a few days ago and have been hooked ever since. It's phenomenal. I have even opened my Nook app a few times to pick up where I left off only to have a brief moments of panic when I couldnt find Endangered in my Library. This is so unlike any other story I've read here that my brain associates it with a true published book. There were even times during the sex scenes in each chapter that I started getting restless because, though the sex scenes are HOT!, I was eager to find out what happened next in the story line. Just incredible! GIVE US MORE!!!

When is chapter 7 going to be released? I know it's finished so please don't make us wait to much longer as we begin to forget the story line

Is it soup yet.

Yours Truly

A hungry public.

Chapter 7 will be released when Chapter 8 is written. After a 3 year wait i'm happy knowing that there's another 2 chapters on the way.

... :(

II NEED to know how this ends

An amazingly engaging story. Thank you for the work yourself and your editor have put into this tale, and most of all,thank you for sharing this with us.

This is sort of thing I would willingly pay to read on Kindle if it were available.

A little disappointed that I've finished chapter 6 after reading it straight through to this point. I hope I don't have to wait to long for the next chapter.

Best regards

Kwazy Wabbit.

I don't think there's another 2 chapters coming, we've been promised now for about two months that chapter 7 will be released when chapter 8 is done, why can 7 not just be posted, at least it keeps us interested and curious

You have an impressive imagination, and a writers mind. Other than occasional homonym mistakes, which make it apparent you are using Dragon dictation or something, the grammar is spot on, and the pacing and cohesiveness of your story is superb. I'm thoroughly engrossed in your believable characters, and can't wait to see what happens next.

(BTW, I wonder if Chris can change size/perspective in the Ether, maybe grow to giant size, maybe shrink down a bit, then pull out of the ether and maintain the change, wink, wink...) Perhaps that is how the extradimensionals that started the Being war shrunk ancient humans to become sprites in the first place, and why sprites prefer to stay in the ether, so their artificially shrunken bodies aren't at odds with the physics of the real world.

Message me if you need a free edit before you publish! (I wasn't an English major in college, but I was raised by a college English instructor, and while I may not catch all the grammatical nazi-isms, I usually can spot most errors in syntax, grammar, spelling, etc.)