All Comments on 'Ethan's First'

This was a reasonably decent story line, shot to shit with moronic writing. I gave up shortly after 'softmore.'

Work on your writing

Loved the storyline and would like to see more from it. However your writing definentally needs some improvement. Best advice I can say is to maybe get yourself a proofreader of some sort to help you? Continue this story! I like where it's going :)

Really liked the story, but you need a proofreader.

Good story man!!!!!!! tell the haters to eat shit! I'm waiting for a part 2. keep up the good work.

No one is perfect assholes! This was a good story and he should continue..

If Amber is as casual about sex as she appears from this story, she's probably a walking petri dish for STDs. Still, sounds like Rachael's going to substitute in the next round.

I'm going to get an editor on this to fix the errors (very sorry about that, I should have noticed a bunch of the easy ones).

Thanks everyone for the comments, even the negative ones are appreciated so I can improve on the next story.

Maybe the constant stutter wasn't because he was nervous.

Loved it, great story, keep writing!

When I clicked on this website and came across your story I knew for sure that Ethan's First is the best sex story in this website! But what would have made the story even better is if during when Ethan is sucking Amber's tits Ethan goes down and eats her juicy pussy!

It sounds like this STUD would be great in a threesome with Rachael and Amber.

Enjoyed the story. Would those who always critical tell us which stories they wrote so we can critic your screwed up mind. If you don't enjoy something that has spelling or grammar errors, click off the story. It doesn't take any more effort to stop reading as it does to get stupid and write about the things you don't enjoy. This was an interesting story and forget the mistakes. QUESTION: when reading the daily newspaper do you write the editor and complain about some misspelled word? Continue with your story and the story line made for ideal reading.

I imagine sexy young Ethan with just a bit of chest hair growing between his pecs -- just enough to entice her to taste his sexy manly chest!

I was hoping Rachael would latch onto Ethan right away.