by manyeyedhydra
A small deviation from your usual...I like the uniqueness.
The direction you were taking with this is interesting. We always assume Hell is a place no being ever wants to be in, but in this case, Hell is home for the demon(?) protagonist.
A hell (haha) of a lot of metaphors and adjectives that, in my opinion, are a little too frequent. During the sex scene, it reads a little forced, as if you're putting in descriptions just for the sake of creating more imagery, but it doesn't flow well.
The normal life on Earth sections are really well written. Nice :)
I found it really interesting that demons would consider a regular day of ours to be their hell. An interesting idea.
Writting was good as usial, but the story lacked direction or conclusion. It was as grey as the land that it was written about.
Loved this one, you broke with your usual death by snu snu and toyed with the ideas of hell and and an incubus. The pseudo love with the succubus was also a fun twist since it still had its horror elements. The only thing I wanted was more length.