All Comments on 'Extra Fun'

The first sentence reads as though her bed is in the living room. Then there was "per say" when you meant "per se." I couldn't read much more, though I liked the concept.

Where have all the standards gone? This website used to have some, but now illiterate crap like this actually gets posted.

but the readers didn't. The prose is average quality at best, marred by several grammatical errors. I chuckled at "O Fuck", struck by the whimsical similarity to "O Henry." As stroke stories go, it's tolerable but as a work of literature, it's not so good since good fiction requires a plot, some interesting characters, and some idea as to why one would read the tale. This story has none of those. I thank you for your effort.

Oh come on folks, give it a break. It's a cute story.

I like the concept, the writing itself was a little sketchy. I can appreciate that I didn't have to read seven pages of life story behind the characters and alot of fluffy metaphors before the real reason I'm reading comes up, what ever happened to just sex. I think that's the point, its just sex, but it's definitely sex in need of an editor.

P.S. To the writer, I've read much worse on here, try harder, get an editor:)

"Wham, Bam thank you ladies" just about sums it up.

"Where was the writer taught to write he should go back to school" I couldn't mark it. not a good read, incoherent at times.