All Comments on 'Eyes on the Ice'

Blake wasn't very smart in the beginning but it all worked out in the end.

Good story, but you HAVE to edit or get someone to do it for you.

I spent several weeks searching for and emailing editors with no luck, so I got sick of waiting so I decided to do it myself. Proof reading and corrections are my greatest downfalls, I hate them and I suck at it so thank you for your patience with the errors that I missed.

In the disclaimer I mentioned that I was looking for an editor, so if anyone has any recommendations I will absolutely take them!

I will definitely take any tips and corrective criticism that you guys have and comment on so I can imporove my writing.

Thanks for reading!

-EgyptOasis

Good god, a quality hocky story and not from the pens of MugsyB or PennLady how controversial.

Well done. Looking forward to more great stories from you

This is exactly what love is all about. Loved their love-making, the sexy trail of hair on his abs, and his blonde hair. Was so happy to see them connect, then reconnect. Long may they love each other!

It took a while to get things sorted out in the beginning between characters. Once I did the story came together nicely. I feel like there could be more to the story and a little bit richer character development. Blake could have expressed to Miranda what the issue was and there should have been a better exchange there. All in all it was a good read.

I loved this story! Thank you for writing it...thank you for submitting it! It was absolutely the very thing I needed to to read at the very moment I needed to read it.

“On one of Luke and I's dates…”

You don’t need an editor or a proofreader to know that “I’s” is NOT a word. We generally use the word “my” in English.