All Comments on 'Family Lodge Ch. 03'

You really needed an editor on this chapter. Lots of typos, and a couple of spots that just did not make any sense at all.

Personally I did not think that much of the story but that is just my opinion somebody else may think otherwise.

I too think you need an editor. It would really help to wait a couple of days then print your story off so you can take your time to read it through slowly. It seems that you are relying too much on spellcheck. Spellcheck only tells you if the word used is spelled correctly

the theme is unique but still it need to be continued

I thought the story was very interesting and a little unique. Enjoyed it!