All Comments on 'Fantasy'

The writing style was very weak, it was just a list of what was done.

Amateurish writing. The story fails to grab the reader and sustains absolutely no interest.

The attempt to "put the reader in the story" with the use of second person, misses completely.

I thought you did very well with this story. I wanted to read more! You kept it very intense and interesting. I give you props.