by KalDarov
Is your first language French?
Enjoying this .... got to get to chapter 2
the story itself is intriguing but you are in dire need of an editor. It's pretty hard to read.
Did you think of using Patreon? Your stories are amazing. I would support you and you really need the exposure. Hope you read this comment. After what happened with your comments on your previous stories and death threats I am amazed that you stuck to writing.
Keep working on them.