All Comments on 'Fiona the Deal Facilitator Ch. 01'

Get an editor, please. Could be good but it need a lot of work. Keep trying

I like it but agree that the author needs an editor or at least a proofreader. Looking forward to the next chapter.

The corporate whore theme has been much used, but I find them usually very engaging and erotic. I look forward to this author’s treatment, and of Fiona’s new “office” is complete and Fiona is able to break it in.