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AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago

'Stabs completely through her cervix?' No, not even if his dick is hard enough to pound nails. Other than that misstep, this was strong.

Ashesh9Ashesh9over 7 years ago
Beautiful

English writing technique : 5-ed and Fave-ed !!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago

I'm so glad someone else said something about the cervix stabbing thing. Physical innacuracies like that totally rip me out of the moment and you just kept using that line. Otherwise the story was enjoyable

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Not to beat a dead horse, but . . .

What woman doesn't want her cervix stabbed completely through? Tsk, tsk! It did provide a good laugh, though.

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