All Comments on 'Flatmates'

And you started the story off slow, let's see where it goes.

A very nice, sexy story. Sexy from both Roger's and Tina's point of view. I really love the idea of Tina, pretending to be asleep, being carried in Roger's arms and feeling so safe and so exposed.

John presents an interesting version of woman as the Temptress, an established character in literature since Genesis. Tina deliberately dresses in Roger's pajamas so that he'll strip them off. John switches voices in midstory between Roger discovering Tina asleep in his night clothes and Tina who's playing Roger to get his attention. This is considered a violation of a rule of story telling which posits that a scene can only be told from the point of view of only one perspective character, but the unorthodox maneuver is well done.