All Comments on 'Flirting with Mom Goes Too Far'

Hugo,

This isn't a play, lose the M: S:. The story could be good if you got a good proofreader/editor. Read some of the stories by silkstockinglover or some of the established writers. Keep trying you will get better.

Daytymer

For been your first story here it was very good I liked it. Keep up the great work.

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what the fuck is this shit????

All mothers and sons should experience such uninhibited.

Enjoyed

You had a decent idea, but you blew it miserably in the execution. Gave you a "2".

But needs a lot of work **

I hope you finished

"shaggy breasts"

"You re expecting ..."

"t-shit"

"but my reaction but my decision was taken in a second"

What daytymer said.

I like the build up.....not premeditated...Please continue

What the Hell is a "trimmed womb?" The womb is an internal organ, not visible from the outside of the body, and how is it 'trimmed?'

It needs much work!

Lessons in basic human anatomy.

Tips are very welcome! Even the ones that do not intend to be constructive :)

Happy 2018 folks!

Some improvement needed but I really liked the casual plot. Tks

Needs some work

Hot. More to cum?

I see your first language is not English. Some of the mistakes are funny ("Shaggy breasts"? Is she a Wookie?) but most are not. Please get an English-speaking editor because this is an imcomprehensible mess.

This "S" and "M" stuff? That has nothing to do with poor English. This is just ridiculous, unless you're writing a script.

The first part is obviously written by someone for whom English is a second language.... then the narrative and dialogue suddenly become fluent... then at the end, ESL again.

I thought the story was worth three out of five stars.

Geez. A great preamble yet no climax. Leaves the question: did they or didn't they?

Wow that was really good

This is the best I've read in a long time!

But you stopped it before the follow through just before he inserted himself in his mother. Such a shame but one hell of a teaser. Only 4 out of 5. Would have been a perfect 5 with the follow through?

Great story. Had me very hard reading it. Can’t wait for part Two.

Why are there so many negative comments. You don’t have to be grammatically perfect to write a sexy erotic story.

Well done !!

Sucky ending. Why?

Horrible grammar actually does piss a lot of people off. You think cuz they’re adult stories not being able to spell or using the proper words in the proper context doesn’t matter. This is why in the past ten to 15 years you see more and more of this and not just on sites like this. Somewhere along the line enough people said who cares and that’s when things started to slide. I’ve read stories on this site that had so many errors and misuse of words that I could not continue. It does matter!

Grammarly is your friend.

Great you should make a video absolutely

I would flirt with my mom time to time but one weekend we both been flirting and I decided to see how far she would go, I was in the bathroom talking a shower and decided to walk around in a towel as I walked in the kitchen mom was making dinner I reached around her to give her a hug she wiggle her ass a little and slowly rubbed her ass again me I kissed her neck as she reach her hand around her and said you are naked as she slowly turned I started to undressed her and told her it's time to stop flirting around with each other I'm going to slowly make love to you and then you will be all mine forever we are husband and wife now for the last 12 years