All Comments on 'Flyin the Friendly Skies'

Please write part2

Alanscormack@hotmail.com

Please continue...

Holy Crap! Don't stop...I'm almost there... Loved it, thanks :)

more chapters please this one was great

Please add more! Great story!

Thank you for such a well written piece I cant wait for the follow on to this . I know the way I want it to go . They fall deeply in love and need each other . Thank You so much ..

very nicely written and developed. Would really love to meet a person like her and definitely repay the same way she did to her hero ;).

Great job. Love to see more.

I really hope this is a chapter 1, as this is a beautiful start and I want more.

Lovely characters, very sensual and then a very erotic payoff.

i (finally) have submitted part 2. I hope you enjoy it!

Perfect character details and writing, this should get 10 stars!

After seeing this writer's story numbers, I expected a fairly good story !

What I did not expect was the amount of screw-ups in the writing. Of course there were the "way over use" of the conjunctive word "AND" in places it was totally wrong to use.

This writing would have a much better flow with a bit more work from the author by using better conjunctive words, even short terms to move from sentences or descriptions forward.

As I began the read I was immediately trying to figure out who was or was going to become the lovely gurl with the phallus. With the introduction of the fabulously gorgeous model, I was all but positive that Melani / Melania would be the chick with a dick !

Why do a large percentage of Dicks in these stories have longer, larger than average penises ?

Now on with the show !