All Comments on 'Fond Memories'

This story could be a lot better if you used an editor. There are a few places with odd word choices that are confusing for the reader. IE) your vs you're, caste vs cast, presences vs present, lude vs lewd and "viciously searching the floor" Really? viciously? Very odd. You should also probably include the tag "lesbian" if you're including lesbian sex in a story in a different category. Sometimes that will turn readers off. I didn't care, but others will.

Thank you, I would love to find an editor but I just don't know how to get in contact with one. Sending one my way would be a huge help.

Also there's a reason why I left out the tag "gay" or "lesbian", I'm just not a big fan of labels. :)