All Comments on 'Forever Mine'

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GToastGToastabout 16 years ago
Perfunctory

Nicely written, and characters I cared about; but it really needed to go a bit more slowly, to have some development, some buildup. It was over too soon.<p>Well, better to have too little of a good thing than too much of a bad thing. Keep writing, and maybe consult with an editor.

hathorbr1hathorbr1almost 14 years ago
Sweet, very sweet!

I really liked this story a lot. Great Job!

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