All Comments on 'Forgive Me'

This was a good start but if you could flesh it out more and fix your grammatical errors it would be great.

So, a bit psycho, and into BDSM. Not sure I want to know where this is going.

Normally, I would agree with you. However, remember that this is a series of letters, basically several monologues. What we say and what we write are often very different, Spoken words are often colloquial, using looser syntax and grammar. When dialogue/monologue is written as rigidly as exposition, it often comes off stilted and forced.

My apologies to all who read this entry and were taken aback about the poor quality of the writoing. I did not respect the wrting process. Again, my apologies. This is listed as anonymous as I am having heckuva time reconnecting with my literotica account and can't seem to get anyone to respond to my email. The current email in my profile is inactive so I cannot get responses to it. Anyway, my apologies for being less than vigilant.

A very interesting take on this genre. I would love to see more. Thanks