All Comments on 'Free Time for a Wife'

Good reading...

Not a single WORD of dialogue detected. (Narrating what people talked about does NOT count as hearing /reading/ them say it!)

Whenever possible, don't TELL the readers what happenED, if the reader could 'hear' the participants AS they are saying it! In THIS case, we get TOLD what Sweetie is seeing (and hearing) some actors doing! Gee, an erotic tale where the major eroticism is a housewife watching a porn film! And 'Jilling Off'! (Other side of guys Jacking Off!)

2.4 = 2*

An interesting way to tell your story. Maybe to did not work quite as well as it could but it is enjoyable. Of course there was no dialogue, she was alone and the 'actors' in the video would not be inspiring would they?

At least I enjoyed and look forward to your future postings. A fine "debut" story posting. Thanks,

Love your attention to the sexual details of the movie. Sounds like a nice DVD with hot action. If I were the wife and watching this DVD I would masturbate too!!

This story made me hot. I love watching porn with my lover before we get started. It makes the sex so much hotter.

That.made no sense at all. Written by a drunken sixteen year old.

5 stars.