All Comments on 'Game of Power Ch. 01'

Your writing is so well thought out and this story is defiantly going somewhere. Keep up the great work.

Please keep on going with this story

So far I've enjoyed it very much!

This is one of the best stories I have read so far. Great beginning....I can't wait to read more. 5 stars

In the time period that you have set your story there were no zippers on pants and men would not have worn khakis to a formal ball where women are wearing silk ballgowns. Be careful with details like that because small details aid the believability of your story. Very good so far!

Thanks for noticing the clothing situation. But this story is actually very modern, don't be fooled! :)

I'm so glad I stumbled upon this absolute gem! I can't wait for more! Good luck, I'm looking so forward to seeing what you come up with!

Couldn't help but notice...

500 years.

50 years between gatherings.

Only 5 gatherings?

I'm guessing you changed a number later on and forgot to go back...

last year a male ruined a tapestry.500 50 5 and then 1 year.for the comment of this was so well thought out i think you might want to re write since all these errors were found.while the story is interesting trying to figure out when it takes place is kind of annoying it reads like an 19th century event until it says there are american packs.if it takes place at that time the european pack wouldnt be calling them americans yet.for several years after the revolution we were the upstarts or other degrading names.

but lots of little details that don't quite fit together. Be careful and consistent- you have a very good story in the makings!

Inconsistent facts with hateful main characters.

Obviously, as comments have pointed out, I have a few details that needed to be tied together better or worded properly to make sense. I made the few adjustments to the chapter so it'd be a much cleaner read and make more sense to those of you with a critical eye. I appreciate everyone who has been reading closely enough to point out my mistakes! An edit has been submitted and the blemishes on this chapter should clear up soon enough. But regardless of my slip ups, I hope there is a story behind them that many of you have enjoyed reading!

Are You Working On Other Chapters Or Rewriting This One ?

I love your pace and the plot is nice and unique. With some technical tweaks and a continuation I can see this being a favorite.

More needs to be written! What happened!! You must tell us.

Btw, great story. ./looking for the nextie

I'm going to pull all my hair out. I can't wait for the next part. This was just a little tease to wet our whistles. Oh and please make her a little nicer to her mate.

Havent read a good story in quite a while. When is the next chapter ready?

I'm hooked already and am looking forward to continuing reading your story. Can't wait!

I can't wait to see more of this story!! Please keep going!

Please write the next chapter. Really looking forward to how the story develops. Great writing so far.

I hate Airami. she's acting like a bitch.

Nothing like a good chase for a wolf. I do so believe the game is afoot.

ChelseaTay, I just want to applaud you for the great narrative and prose that you've used for Game of Power. I seriously enjoyed the way you expanded the scene right off from the first paragraph, and you definitely manage to make the whole gathering feel atmospheric despite of putting some formality into the gathering.

The only downside is that while I love stories about werewolves, I just encounter too many 'alpha/destined mates' themes and while I understand it's the premise--I just really wish that this story didn't have those themes (sorry, I just got a lot of issues with those themes. Like how it makes both parties act completely out of character (like Oliver who is regarded as very quaint and gentlemanly--but his female mate never gets approached by his human side and is instead just barrelled by his 'dominant wolf side' apparently) and they're all 'suddenly' forced to hastily get together by 'the powers that be' like a bunch of marionettes which sounds terrifying and mentally-scarring TBH). For a story about werewolves, it just suspends my belief that such a thing would be begrudgingly accepted in any society (I mean, if our society has to deal with getting 'bodysnatched' by your own hormones which drives you to bang a random stranger and claim them (regardless of who they are, etc) I'd think it'd drive plenty of people to start doing drastic measures to keep it from happening to them). Especially when we don't know what makes the criteria of a perfect mate: Is it someone who's good at being a pack leader, but the Powers That Be doesn't care if the person's trustworthy, kind, or resourceful?

Seriously, Airami's first impressions of Oliver Tremblay sound cute. It would've been awesome to see someone gentlemanly get suddenly hit by the realization that his true mate's at the gathering, but he tries to restrain it hard because he's scared, exhilarated, and it's otherwise rude to lose his own control. He's not sure what he would find about his mate, and he's not sure if he'd accept her flaws or run for the hills (and I'm sure his mate would definitely feel the same way). I feel this story would be much better if you've shown him and his mate struggle and try to check each other out (while Airami scoffs and feels sure that the mated pair aren't suited for each other)--and then unleash the ultimate pay-off (instead of unleashing it almost right away) until one hour in, they finally realize how much they want each other and just went for it.

Like I said, I'm really sorry about this--Twilight's ruined the whole 'destined mated pair' thing for me, and there is so much cool potential about this story which would put it heads above shoulders of all the thousands of other 'mated pair bond' stories here. I absolutely like Airami and her brother, and it would be awesome to see snubby aristocratic werewolves that would play crochet by day but wolf out and kick ass by night. So I just want to say that you've made a fantastic execution with this story and premise--but I just feel that the thing between Oliver and his mate was overdone by too many writers of the werewolf genre.

Inconsistencies also include Daniel wearing khakis although it is a royally formal event, and small children attending a formal ball.

I am not sure I am interested enough to read more about such a snob as Airami.