by steviet
I crossdress and I have a boyfriend. If I looked good enough as a guy to totally pass as a pretty girl, I would be on hormones so fast it would make your head spin.
I'd love to be Gigi, except with big white cock! I want to become a cock sucking, cum swallowing slut and a cock fucked nymphomaniac!!!
The premise & narrative was good but you're good enough at telling a good sexy story to deserve truthful criticism. Your story is filled with spelling errors, gramatical mistakes, & problems constructing narrative & they get in the way of this being a well written story. You need to avail yourself of a good volunteer editor & learn to grow your considerable writing talent because you've got promise my friend.
So well written and perfectly paced. Got me so wet all over! Want more! Now!
Xoxo, Di
Can't wait to see Gigi's evolution into a real slut!
I know I am echoing a lot of the comments but that was so very sexy! Oh to be Gigi! I am glad it was titled chapter 1...hope there is more!
Other than a few minor typos, this was a great read, Looking forward to chapter 2. Rereading, or an editor for the typos would be nice, but there were few and far between, so easily dealt with... Hopefully not a long wait for #2
Seconded: Does it ever need a second chapter :) well written, good grammar, hot as fuck, damn, WRITE FASTER!!!