All Comments on 'Genie Adventures'

Your story is rushed. Needs to be slowed down. Spell out your descriptions. Have an editor. Way too many grammatical and spelling errors.

You also need to break up your paragraphs into shorter versions. Each new thought, and if someone is speaking when they finish at the very least a new paragraph unless they talk about several topics then perhaps several paragraphs. Always make sure the words spoken are in quotes.The part with Selena should have been a new paragraph with each command.

Perhaps put this story away for a month or two then come back and rewrite it. I did that with my first book and it came out far better and almost twice as long as I described things far better. As it this story has potential but right now it's not very good.

Great effort, keep it up. Not professionally done, needs some work but still a good read.

You entire story was written like a page one intro that was rushed. Your details need a lot of work as well.

The story is way to short does not leave room for much character development at all. Gave it a 2 star rating. make your story longer do some character development. Makes the story much more interesting when you have developed your characters.

This seems to be a one-page story with no character development and a lot of grammatical errors. The idea has potential. Please think long and deep before you write again. And get your stories edited.