All Comments on 'Ghouls Ch. 00'

Everyone is speaking in first person. I am not sure if there are two, three, or four sets of siblings. This could have been twice as long without problem and we would be able to follow you better.

Still, it sounds interesting and I'm hoping you continue to unravel it for us.

arent you funny! bwahahahaha...

elves(i'm not using it the way you spelled it) and zombies....seriously,this is dumb...go back to the drawing board