All Comments on 'Girlfriend, Mother, and More Ch. 01'

Fucking wonderful, my girl friend and her best friend renacted this and we were creaming for hours, sucking and fucking each other into next week and then some. More and more and soon please

It would be better if you could decide if you are writing in the first or third person.

Starts in 3rd person, swaps to 1st. Amanda is called both "Mrs. George" and "Amanda Warne". Story itself is pretty good, just a few too many little mistakes.

Absolute dross. Story is everywhere.

Grammar is terrible.

Poor us some wine! Pour.

Write about a big cock and some morons love it.