All Comments on 'Golf-India-Romeo-Lima Ch. 01'

You need to get better editors, trying to read your version of English is too tedious to try and continue, good luck

Phenomenal story and very well written. I may not be a grammar expert, but this was great!

A nice story.

hp

Loved it!! The intimacy just melted me - about the best I've ever read. Hey, I'm an editor, too. Your content certainly didn't slow my experience to tedium or even cause concern with grammar issues. And that may happen if the story isn't taking me on an entertaining ride. Yours did. I'm so ready for Ch 2. Kudos!

It may be a good read for a few, but i would not put this series in Romance category. I wish Lit would monitor the categories as they used to.

Hey so... Nice story so far. I think that some of the criticism is warranted as your word choices and idiom are odd enough to trip over. Might want to talk to your proof readers about any oddities they might find, but harsh complaints of tediousness are (as most internet commentaries) totally overwrought.

Also please excuse the hetrocentric whining. Romance is romance genders be damned. It would be fair to say that the action started a bit quick for a romance story. we hardly know these girls when it heats up.

Oh... and Priest doesn't have a mascot. Never confuse Eddie with anything other than Iron Maiden... Up the Irons!

for your comments.

I did not know that romance is so strictly preserved for the hetero love alone. I will remind about that in the future.

In addition I will 'run to the hills' 'aces high' and do penance for the epic Eddy fail with my 'face in the sand'.

Thank you for the advice.

\m/

Le mans 1000, amazing classic. More into modern European bikes, Have an z1000. But many people cannot describe bikes they way you did.

I can tell you are a rider. The explanation on gears confirms.

Love on bikes is a whole different thing.

Sadly, it's the only thing I love. The bike.

Amazing story!

I'm glad you liked it. I have had this bike indeed. And I really did put it apart and reassembled it piece by piece. I admit I share your passion and devotion for riding. In addition I love old things. They talk to me somehow and I adore the aura they wear. I always try to imagine what kind of stories they would tell, if they'd be able to talk.

I sincerely hope you'll soon find the one you will feel for with the same love, passion and devotion.

Have a mishap free bike season. Drive safe.

best regards

Pandorra

Already mentioned the only flaw I found so, I'll just say this is a wonderful story and I'm enjoying it immensely!

Up The Irons!!!!

I am a hetero male who reads a lot. I found your description to be very romantic. I found the comments on word choice being odd a little strange. To be frank I didn't notice any strangeness.

What interested me the most (besides the sex) was the immediate emotional closeness. I believe that is something most males don't feel. Not that it won't or can't develop but the immediacy would be unusual in men. Do you find it so?