by Slider1234
All I can say is, that this is the single best story (erotic or otherwise) that I have ever read. I cannot imagine the time and effort that you took writing this story. It is a MASTERPIECE. PLEASSSE write more!!!
Best one of the three because it makes me so happy! Would have thought more comments then this though...
Billy
I liked it. I've read it a few times and didn't know what exactly to think, but I believe I do like it. I wish you'd done it in chapters rather than two really, really, REALLY long stories, but other than that, yeah, it's good...considering it's the only story on this site about Larisa.
I don't know what that guy was saying about it being juvenile. I thought it was a beautiful story. Yeah so what it was 13 pages I thought that build the anticipation and made the story that bit more rewarding. As for semantics/grammar etc. unless it makes the story unreadable I don't see it as the slightest issue. Slider this was one of my favourite stories on literotica - keep it up.
Great Story dont usually read long stories, but after the first page I just had to. Any sequels to this will be greatly appreciated
The style is trite, juvenile, and the grammar needs a ton of work. 13 pages long, and 3 of them were worth the read.
Great story. I had to read it straight thru, couldnt put it down. It read like a movie.