All Comments on 'Granddaughter's Virginity'

Another writer that think present tense is a good POV to write in. It's not!

From a writer's pov, the story flows easier when writing erotica. Also, my Muse, the woman I wrote this for (in her thirties) was able to identify more easily.

Most of my writing hasn't been erotica and on those occasions, the pov and tense are dictated by the story. It's what feels right. Thanks for reading.

I want to hear about the 'other hour in bed after breakfast'... :)

Crystal and I put the bed sheets in the wash. They were kinda messed up with bodily fluids. Then we chatted. ;)

Thanks for your comment.

How about you fix your English first.

in the fifth, last paragraph I use 'her' three times instead of 'you.' Silly mistake, but hardly what could be called 'English' errors. English is my first language, but perhaps you'll be able to enlighten me on my errors. I always welcome constructive criticism.

never put yourself into someone elses shoes. You do not know how she feels. Quit telling her what she is doing, she knows what she is doing. Tell the reader.

let's not kid ourselves; most of us don't expect Literature with a capital 'L.' Big deal because I changed the POV to the grand daughter when I wrote, 'You're confused.' OK, I should have written. 'You look confused.'

What was that... List interest from first few paragraphs.. you ... You ..your. ... Crap... How about she.. her... !!

Another chance to bump it

Love the story!!

And I know why! ;) x

Interesting story, but change the 'you & your' to 'she & her'. For the right grammar

for the email from Anon in the Feedback message this morning. Can't respond as I don't have a name. :)

when my oldest granddaughter turned 18 we started our incest she'd found out I was screwing her mom and said to me do me and all will be fine...I do both now.

who sent me a message yesterday, send another with your email address.

virgin for your sexy message through Feedback

love this story...very well written

when I was younger I always had a thing for my pawpaw,he was right there for me as I grew up I always thought him and my mom had a thing going on(did) and I just knew it..well on day when I was bout 18 I decided I had to have him and I did he was all over my 18yr old body he did things to me till this day nobody has I still get to see him and make love with him but between me and mom he has the best of life.CR