All Comments on 'Hands Off...or On'

good! keep working

It was good but felt too rushed... slow it down and it will flow a lot better.

The characters made a sudden change too abrupt to be believable. If you could add something more to flesh them out and make a segue into the sex scene, it might be a good story.

Jack was a brutal prick in the beginning. I can't believe any girl would be turned on by that approach, or that a man with that attitude would change into a lover. There ought to be at least a little romance, especially when a virgin girl gives up her maidenhead. But she was really forced. I hope that you have a much more romantic time when you give up your virginity.

Why do people write that someone is made pregnant when get, become pregnant? I don't understand that.