by candyflossbaby
Fantastic submission. A few typos and teeny plot issues, as some other people have already noted. But they didn't detract from the story, which was erotic, sweet, and believable. Great story; keep it coming!!
Fantastic story. I enjoyed it a lot.
Might want to check some of the typos, like "colour bone", but really very good.
and hot as hell. Sensual and erotic all rolled into one. Great job.
Excellent erotic action. Good imagination from someone claiming to be "shy girl no-one would expect it from". A few minor typos; not seriously distracting. Some plot discontinuities. (When did she put her panties and bra on?)
I loved this! Very well written, and extremely erotic and arousing--