All Comments on 'Happy Anniversary'

You have the basis for a terrific and sexy romantic story here, but you treated the material like nothing more than a bragadocious Penthouse/stoke-tale letter.

Try it again, but with feeeellinggg...make the romance and emotions of the evening the feature of this story and you will have a much better story here.

The story sounded to clinical try more finesse in the writing.

I would like to thank all of you for your suggestions. I've been meaning to get back into writing, so these critiques will surely help me give a better story next time :)