by Luckie_Duckie
That was a wonderful.When did they get married? I thought they were not able to get married before her death. Overall it was an excellent read.
just too distracting that the chapters are so short, I'd rather wait a couple of days and get a decent chunk at once. Only a minor complaint though!
I don't like the way you switch the point of view in narration. You shouldn't do that. Either stick to 1st person or 3rd person.
Secondly, I think you forgot some parts of your own story and created unintentionally bloopers. I agree with the poster before me. Longer chapters with more time in between them would improve your story. You could take your time to rearead everything and maybe bush up things.
Good chapter.... I'm glad Regan remembered Cien and her life with him. But since she went into the future to the point where she just came to Scotland wouldn't Tilda still be alive. Since you killed Regan and brought her back why not do the same with Tilda. when did they get married?
I just love the story but the ending is weak, like it's missing something. And it would have been nice to actually read a secret wedding scene so that it wasn't secret from us. Not to mention a hot wedding night scene!
I like the whole series but there is lacking in your ending as if you stop writing the ending... I didn't say it's not good but only something missing
Were you ispired by "The outlander" series by Diana Gabaldon???
Sounds so familiar....
I must say that I enjoyed your version!
Thank you for writing this story and sharing it. I ran across it today and could not stop till I read all of them. I loved it!!
I read your series and I must say that I enjoyed your writing style. However I did find the chapters very short. I also found it lacking in sexual experiences. I find it very hard to believe that these two people who had such chemistry restrained from having more intimacy even back in those days.
And after all this site is called LITEROTICA. But other than that, good read :)
Thanks loved your story made me smile made me cry, didnt mind the short chapters and no sex made refreshing change
to favourite this - just so I can find it quickly again in the future...*grin*