All Comments on 'His Pretty Pets Ch. 01'

I hope you can keep the tension up. Forced submission is a delicate subject. Have at it.

Well written. A teriffic beginning. I hope there are more chapters to come. I'd have preferred if it took longer -- i.e. more steps -- before either girl got to enjoy their first orgasm. And more steps of forced petting the girls, and longer until either gave her first complete blowjob.

Very good writing, and well thought-out. My only complaint is more of a critique on his technique. It would be best if he had played them against each other, fostering a rivalry and competition between them, driving them apart. Instead of making them want to stay, make them forget that there is anything else.

Still, as I said, it's more of a method difference than a complaint. And Bravo! I didn't see any grammar or spelling errors! And it's sad that I have to keep an eye out for them. You should see some of the godawful grammar...