by Sputnik57
I really did love this story. I am a male submissive. I have not found many stories about male submissives. I would have loved to be either Larry or Scott. I am right into BDSM. I love being disciplined by strap, cane, crop, whip. I would be very happy to engage in conversation with like-minded people - either Doms or subs. I am very happy to supply my Email Address which is keithsmithkiwi509781@gmail.com.
This story is so superb, as is Female Supremacy,
just can't wait to read what is going to happen further;
to give you an idea how much i enjoined it : i came 5 times reading :)
I'm STILL laughing at how bad this was! Cardboard characters running amok for no reason. Not a single decent person in here and nothing clever, interesting or entertaining. JUST AWFUL.
Pages 6-8 are gone! I read 1-4 yesterday, ran out of time, came back and whaaaaa?
I enjoyed as far as I got.
... I can see you really enjoy my work, such microscopic scrutiny! I can see you are a real fan.
lay off all the adverbs and adjetives and tell the story with a few well chosen words. you write like you're being paid by the word. seriously, when you find yourself using "supremely" more than twice a page it is time to invest in a thesauras.
Keep it up, l like your fanmail.
What the fuck. You can write, but you turn everything into a moaning, whimpering, cackling and sneering orgy of cartoon characters. You leave the reader cringing and laughing, and not in a good way.