All Comments on 'Hollywood Noir Ch. 02'

one of the best writers, glad to read you back :)

You obviously know little about true pain. Torturing another human being isn't sexy or erotic and certainly wouldn't lead to an orgasm on his part. And one good shot to her throat and she'd be all done. A truly horrible story.

Into the sewer that is sputniks mind. Not a pretty sight is it.

An interesting read. Your grammar and spelling really need work! You spelled many words wrong. Here instead of hear. The one that made me laugh was bear instead of bare. Many times you to and too wrong. Of in place of off. It can be very hard to read. Marcia in place of Maria.

Dear anonymous, thanks for the tips re a tale written 8 years ago - you may find some improvement with recently penned attempts!