All Comments on 'Home Invasion'

is a decent premise and obviously fun, however, an editor would have benefited you tremendously. The tale is just so hard to read because everything runs together.

Rape suddenly becomes the magic cock again

Zzzzzz

I couldn't even bring myself to read the whole story, I agree with what someone else said , it all runs together. It was interesting just needed editing.

I love the smelling of worn panties of Rachel's daughter. Inhaling her musky pussy odor.

I though it was great

It would have been much better if she had continuously begged him not to impregnate her with his bastard whilst still orgasming multiple times, instead of her magically wanting it halfway through. Perhaps if she had more lines like:

"Please wear a condom!"

"Don't give me bastard child!"

"Cum on my face or stomach! Or I can even suck you dry!"

Should have had her begging him not to knock her up with his bastard instead of having her magically want it halfway through.

I couldn't read it so many mistakes