All Comments on 'Home Invasion Thriller'

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ptebadenptebadenalmost 7 years ago
Everything hapoen too quickly

It is a shame. I'd have loved to spend more time reading much more details about each violation to Jorge, Julie and, of course, Gabriela. Too quick.

screedbearscreedbearover 6 years ago
5

might have a low rating but I didn't think so

AnonymousAnonymousabout 3 years ago

This is all very rushed and unfortunately comes across as very clinical, a bit like reading a shopping list. No offence intended but it made me wonder if English is your first language. There is lots of potential for erotic stories in this one chapter .

Tess (uk)

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