by oggbashan
Wonderful story.
Not exactly what I expected as reading it on Literotica, but i loved it very much.
The two Mohans: as if taken from real life. I'm sure you had two real people in mind when you wrote the story.
But I have to admit that the commentators who complain about the rushed ending have a point.
Just a bit too pat, especially at the end. But nicely done none the less!
of how to do it properly.
It's a damned good tale and well-told.
Thank you
I found many things to be rather humorous; but, I realize that I am reading from the standpoint of an American "manager"! It makes very good sense to me from an employee relations and customer comfort - but also from the standpoint of the condition of the stock! And you added in most definite love story growing in the background! * * * * * !
Thanks a God! An beautiful story. Really romantic. I liked.
Only one thing, is a little short, but a good to read and lovely.
Great Job!
5* for you!
Very nice little story.
Thank you.
There is nothing wrong with the brief epilogue. This is not a story which should go on and on.
Everything has come together and an elegant ending tying it together was best.
But the ending was kind of tacked-on, rushed, and unsatisfying. It would actually have been better to leave off the final epilogue paragraph.