by naughty42
The comments on this story are interesting... jeesh. I really liked the story and I found it very erotic. I would love my husband and dominate to do this to me one day. Very fun read!
Second person viewpoint (I/You) is hard to pull off in a story, for you are telling the reader what they are saying and doing.
It would be a good idea to write more about what people are feeling and thinking instead of only action sentences.
In reality, I hope my partner and I would share the housework, if we were both working. But that didn’t make such a good premise for a story!
Would like more on this subject from you, a bit old-schooled where the woman does the housework. Extremely erotic
Isn't it a pity that we live in times when housework and domesticity have to be DISCIPLINED into women? We may rediscover a world where women are once again proud and happy to create good homes for their husbands.
Today's modern "independent" women don't merely leave messes, they ARE messes! Modern women STINK!