All Comments on 'I Always Hated My Little Stepsister'

Desperately needs editing. Almost unreadable. Some sentences have 3 errors in them.

Your story telling is phenomenal. The concept is great. Find yourself an editor though, please. A few mistakes are easily overlooked in a story this hot, but there are too many here as to (almost) make it unreadable. Find an editor and you could take your place among the big names here. And yes, please continue. Make Hanna their insatiable toy. Pimp her to other men and women. Maybe even her own bitch mom. Or to Chris and Claire's mom to pay for turning her into an alky and druggie. Don't be discouraged. Just find an editor.

Chaper 3: The twins get 5 to 15 years for Criminal Sexual Assault.

Next she is thown to daddy for his birthday

Thanks for the feedback folks, really sorry for the mistakes. How does one go about finding an editor. If anyone would like to volunteer then please feel free to contact me.

Happy to write more but will probably take a few weeks until I have the chance again.

Why is it Hannah's fault that she is shielded away from the conflict?

keep going please

Little details like word usage, spelling, grammar...big game changer for me.

By some of the wordings I can tell that you're British. You're description of the trip sex scene was great. I could just picture the three of them doing all this

Keep up the good work. Like to read more with these three.

Why did Chris wait so long before fucking Claire

Claire is such a bitch but i like her lioking forward to round 2

Can't wait for a second chapter and more afterwards if you decide to continue with their shenanigans

A follow-up with very very detailed descriptions is what's called for now.

wow that got me soooo fucking hard and dripping wet; fuck me that was so damn fucking hot. More Please

The only thing remotely sexy was the dirty talk.

If you put your equipment into a mouth full of teeth and she didn't want it you would be a gibbering screaming wreck in seconds, one swift bite and you would be castrated and even if hit her with a baseball bat it would be to late.

Get real, she obviously wanted it to happen in the first place so probably you need to change the start your story to reflect this at the beginning.

and look forward to a continuation of this tale. What happens when nasty older sister and brother turn step-sister into a cum-slut. The possibilities seem endless.

The little sister was a virgin so hard to believe she would willingly give it up to her stepbrother. However, you did write earlier about how she followed the twin sister and brother everywhere and even elected to stay with them when her mother left. So, maybe she really had a deep crush on both pathing the way for an easy seduction. I liked to way it flowed however, some parts developed very quickly so who knows what she may think when called a slut, cock sucker, etc. Maybe she found the language a turn-on or maybe she yearned for the attention from both twins. I liked the story and feel like some other commenters, that this story should be enlarged to maybe have the little sister craving both twins, even begging to lick pussy, suck cock, or be fucked. Don't add anyone else to the story as many seem to do. Usually spoiling the overall thesis which may be seduction, submission, dependence, etc. Write more with more slow details regarding how the little sister is coerced into giving herself completely to the twins.

The twins seem very comfortable being sexual with each other. I think there is a story there before you move on to further adventures with the step-sister.

i dont know whats hannas fault she isnt responsible for what her mother did to their family

also they had bullied her already and now both of them bullied her raped her they both took all 3 of holes and her complete virginity

its disgusting to punish someone for others crime they ruined all hannahs first time forever she doesnt deserve that after years of getting bullied

seems like these two brother and sister are no diff from hannahs evil mom

i want to shoot claire bitch and her bastard brother

sooner or later they will pimp sweet naive hannah to those dirty pedo atleast claire bitch will .most of the girls name clair are evil whores

had hannah be a bitch like her mother i would have loved this noncon but right now i dont see the reason of ruining her pussy and anal virginity

this story seems to glorify bullies and taking revenge on those who never did any wrong

Too nasty for my liking. Step or not, the little sister was family and it's the job of older siblings to defend the weak not ravish them.