All Comments on 'I, Mutant Ch. 03'

hot stuff, would like his powers

I can see that people seem to like your story, but I just don't see it. There's almost no charachter development, everyone is extremely one dimensional, and the dialogue is weak.

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Train them into bitches in heat that will do anything and anyone at your bidding. the naster the better.

The story had a typical solid plot...

but there was no emotion or feeling to the characters... and almost no description

One of the best stories i've read please more

The story was short but action-packed. Character development would turn your 5 page effort into a 10 page story with no increase in enjoyability.

Writers need more encouragement on this site. I liked your tale. I hope you write more and possibly flesh out the characters and the environments a bit.

Cheers

I have to agree with some of the others here... this could do with a bit more dimension to the characters themselves. It's a fair storyline, but where did these 'powers' come from? A little development along those lines would help too. A mother who was taking some experimental fertility enhancing drug, or a father who worked at a nuclear power plant, for example, or perhaps some sort of freak accident. Not bad, overall, though.

Please continue. ?!?!?!?

Gave it five stars, but since it is several of years old I can't really expect a sequel. Dangit.

When might we get new chapters.

Just gets started is going to college in the Fall and You leave the Story.

By now he has an idea of what he wants and is trying to get it together.

He has already have 2 cheerleaders a Mother of one. So the next step is Financial independence.

So when will we see more of the Story. it would be nice to continue the Mom Daughter thing with every girl he initiates into his Harem.