by jack4194
It does not hold up as a stand alone.
... without Ray. If she had married him she'd let herself in for a life of having a husband who thought it was his prerogative to invade her privacy and make all the important decisions without discussion before hand. I'd guess that this approach is the one preferred by most LW fans even if American society has left it far behind.
Consider what he was planning: an engagement ring and possibly matching wedding ring according to his taste, not hers, and not even a compromise. A guest list without her input? Lying? Not a good sign if he thinks the circumstances - engagement and wedding - can be done in the say way as a surprise party. If she were to marry him she'd find out that things - all things - would be done without her input.
And perhaps she'd learn that revenge is a meal best taken cold Anyway, Shawn is a real jerk - Ray's self proclaimed long time friend - hah!
Then when she finds out he wasn't, she continues to cheat.
This wasnt enjoyable, it was depressing because Shawn isn't a friend to either of them. It's one thing to be stupid, it's another to deceive and hurt the man you think you love.
She should at least admit to him that she cheated and let him decide what to do.
Clearly witton, you have never lived with a serious girlfriend/fiance/wife !
There is no privacy lol You would know that.
The major problems is the bitch has no trust and is completely untrustworthy herself. The non-cheating whore that is trustworthy and trusts her mate, confronts him. Not just jumps on a convenient cock for "revenge"
Then, there is the snake Shawn.
The author wrote this "Wordlessly she got up and went to the bathroom to clean herself off. Half asleep, he didn't pay any attention to her upon her return and thus it finally happened. It was bound to happen eventually, but he had hoped he could hold off longer.She checked her phone. "
He knew and fucked over his long time friend.
He deserves a beating. Not death, not dismemberment. But a damn good beating. Either before or after Ray kicks the whore out.
Lastly, as for Ray, what kind of fuckwad proposes by text??!!
I would rank it higher. Unfortunately, it is just a story fragment.
As written, I, the reader must decide upon certain details. So, I see Shawn as having already known the details concerning Ray and the engagement ring. For him, it was just his last chance to have sex with Amanda before she became engaged to Ray. And for Amanda, it was her chance to be the slut for Shawn that she could not be with Ray. Her affair would continue with Shawn long after she married Ray. Even after having three children, which she couldn't honestly determine were produced by Ray or Shawn. You really should have finished this story.
WTF?! ~ So what happened when Amanda and Ray met up?
(Ray's supposed friend is a weasel!!!)
Idiotic crap. May the characters, shallow and unlikeabe, die in a syphylljtic haze of dementia. May the author just stop writing.
Piece of shit girlfriend cheats and some pussyhound has one over on some clueless boyfriend. Like that stuff? This is a 5 stars story for you.
I hope for part 2 or 3. I love to see revenge on both of them.
A lot of these comments are so dumb, especially that one person being feminazi trash and stating that Amanda was given no input in the guest list and the entire engagement party which is completely stupid considering that none of them were even mentioned in the entire story whatsoever. Classic feminazi trash making up stuff to fit their own agenda.
Man I love to see a reboot or rewrite of this, where the girlfriend decides to continue the game after getting taste of the thrill from cheating along with her boyfriend's best friend's better dick.
Wow, I just discovered this story and it has amazing potential to become an awesome cheating smut series, tho it would require two changes which 8s removing the regret that the girlfriend and best friend have while making the best friend a better lover than the boyfriend. A good name for the series could called "The Cheating Game" as it takes inspiration from how the two began to fuck by playing a little game.
I hope Ray knows and is cool with it. I hope they have a threesome. ππΎπ€ππΎβ€οΈ