All Comments on 'I Will Never Be Loved Ch. 04'

Wish you would make the chapters longer though!

You just cant leave me hanging like this. The story is very good so just keep them coming

but you need to move it along a little. The story is just a little bogged down, either speed it up or provide a little more detail about what is going on around them. longer chapters might help as well. Do not get discouraged, we all want the story to continue.

You really need to combine and post 2 chapters at a time or you will frustrate the readers here. I would strongly recommend that your next posting be 'I Will Never Be Loved Ch. 05 - 06'

Also you should consider posting a link to the other site story on your profile page here.

I'm loving this story right now. keep writing just make the chapters longer.

Too short.

Three stars. Chapters are way too short. It makes it seem as if its so drawn out. You will lose readers this way.

Danielle need to take some of those bricks down from that wall. It's nothing wrong with her being cautious but the rude way she is behaving is not going to accomplish anything.

Saw a couple of typos but great story so far. Needs to be a touch longer but like the set up here

Tedebearone@yahoo.com

Ok, Storyteller, I like your story. I may be able to help you with editing. I have several writers' works in process now but I would be happy to look at your future chapters or other stories. If you wish, you may contact me via the Volunteer Editors List.

and I SSSSOOOOOOO like where this story is going.... keep writing and positing

This is the start of something beautiful. I can feel it.