All Comments on 'Illicit Breakfast'

While this little vignette was indeed hot and sexy, it seemed to lack any real direction or story. The characters/dialogue were pretty flat and there wasn't enough back-story to really hold my interest. As "wank-fest" material, it's okay, but I get the feeling that you could've written a LOT more and seriously enhanced the story by several orders of magnitude. I'm not necessarily asking for more parts/chapters to be written, but I DO think that, in the future, it would be preferable to read a real story instead of a bit of prose which amounts to little more than a snippet.

We needed reminding that this follows Unadulterated, Forbidden Love - I reckon more will come - I hope!

Lukas

It speaks for itself...outstanding...

this should have been part two of a three part series you can't just tell the middle of a story you need to tell the whole story

Try wanking not writing

Highly descriptive tight prose combines with error-free mechanics to provide an experience all too rare on this site, a well written story, intelligent and erotic. One of the best short submissions yet. YOU MUST WRITE MORE LIKE IT. This is gourmet eroticism at its best,

Nicely writen. Did you consider prequel as to how they started their incest relationship?

There is so much more that could be done with the characterisation. This is well written and you have talent.