All Comments on 'In Submission to... Ch. 04'
by MzSapphiria
- 12 Comments
Anonymousalmost 13 years agoI want to read more, but this seemed harsh when they are so new to their relationship. I hope you start writing longer chapters because these are too short.
kelleigh0127almost 13 years agoI must admit I thought the twist was interesting but, it just had me thinking I so wished he found someone else for this torture. The hand, paddle and then the kane???? Wow that was so harsh I hope her ass runs!
Anonymousalmost 13 years agoIt's getting better, I enjoyed the bit oh humor you injected with the internal dialogue, but he's going to have to establish a better connection with her.
Anonymousalmost 13 years agoSo that spanking was a but excessive, especially for two people who really aren't I'm a relationship. Hopefully we get a bit more insight into the two of them in the next chapter.
Anonymousalmost 13 years agoSo Sean seems borderline abusive. You want that much control over someone when you've only known them for a week. She obviously isn't into the same things that he is so maybe he should have gradually introduced it to her instead of beating her. Which is what he did, it was much more than a simple spanking.
MzSapphiriaalmost 13 years agoAuthorits not abusive...trust me its a twist. I am trying something new so forgive me if things go a little awry but its out of love not total obsession. He's a man who has never felt these types of feelings before so he doesnt totally know what to do. Your eyes have to travel deeper into the story. I want the readers to get this inside of they're minds visualize it.
MzSapphiriaalmost 13 years agoAuthoralso remember her first spanking is her initiation key word INITIATION...IT GETS BETTER I PROMISE read ch. 5 and you'll understand
Queen_Vickialmost 13 years agocool chapter love the bdsm route you are taking. Hopefully Kylani will do something naughty, and she'll get a real spanking from Sean.
Anonymousalmost 13 years agoThis dude is nuts. It's like he's playing a BDSM game, but he didn't tell her she was playing too. How can he justify just telling her how things will be and demand she not question him when she doesn't know him, anything about him or about being a submissive, which he clearly wants? He's not coming off as dark and sexy to me....just scary and lifetime-movie worthy.
