by ShaneFull
Not to be a grammar freak, or insulting, but have you considered using a context checker or at least reading what you've written before you hit the submit button. The grammar, spelling, and general standard of this piece just makes it unreadable.
Although I've only put one story out on Literotica, I spent a good deal of time making sure it was readable before I submitted it.
Have just recently stumbled onto this series. I'm greatly enjoying. Very exciting. A great turn-on. There seem to be lots of other possibilites in the story line. I look forward to, hopefully, a very long series with even greater excitement. Thanks.